Saturday, November 15, 2008

Verb, Mind Your Role!

If you were asked to provide a 'tree diagram' for this paragraph, would you manage to do so?

"My concern has been the atrocities there in Darfur and the relevance to me with that issue as we spoke about Africa and some of the countries there that were kind of the people succumbing to the dictators and the corruption of some collapsed governments on the continent, the relevance was Alaska’s investment in Darfur with some of our permanent fund dollars."

Via Dick Cavett's NYT piece.

5 comments:

JJ said...

Say What?!

Sra said...

Ugh, reminds me of the writing of one of the attorneys that I work for.

Tina said...

I bet I know off the bat who the master mind behind such structures is.
Dick Cavett and Maureen Dowd are having too much fun with her.

Tina said...

I bet I know off the bat who the master mind behind such structures is.
Dick Cavett and Maureen Dowd are having too much fun with her.

liam said...

this is one of those sentences which inspires my love-hate relationship with editing. it specifically reminds me of a sentence i'd have to edit written in english by a german. no offense to any germans. :)